Heavy Weather
We are some coffee drinking sonsabitches
and the nurses keep it coming.
We like it better strong and bitter
like hemlock
and life.
We stay long past the allowable hour
while the halls quiet and the coffee comes.
We wait for her to waken.
When she does and I bend close
her fingers reach my face
imprecisely
unfold
against my cheek
and rest.
She frowns at the feeling
on the tips of them and says
how it must be raining
and I say
Yeah Mom
it’s coming down in sheets.
April 12, 2008 at 6:41 pm
bitter like hemlock and life-
and her surprise at your tears, that they couldn’t be,
but something else- rain-
speaks volumes of her strength
and her idea of yours.
Very intimate, clancyjane.
Thank you for sharing.
welcome. 10Q. for reading. for writing. for all.
April 28, 2008 at 8:14 pm
I think this is a tender and wonderful poem. I like everything about it: the contrasts, settings, movement, language, ending. I think using the word “imprecisely” was so perfect and descriptive.
Glad to see you are in operation. I have not been blogging or rolling much lately and missed your return.
you honor me with your kind words–wonderful to hear, especially from someone whose work and opinion i value. thanks very much.